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Writing Lessons from My Editor

By Jared Dees

Last week I returned a manuscript with a number of changes requested by my editor. Responding to her comments and questions made me a better writer. Here are some of the things I learned from her about my writing habits:

What works online may not work in print.

I have a lot of bad blogging habits. When I write a blog post or online article, I keep paragraphs to 1-3 sentences each. That’s a habit I learned not to use in books a long time ago, however, I continue to bring bad blogging habits like superflous capitalization into my books. I also realized there were a number of phrases that would work well online for SEO purposes, but look strange in books. For example, a “vs.” looks great visually online, but not in the middle of a sentence in a book.

Consistent Verb Tense

I got into a bad habit of shifting between “could” and “can” or “would and “will” throughout the book. Consistency is key.

Point of View: I, We, You, or They

I was also very inconsistent in the way I addressed the reader. I often shifted between “we” and “you” throughout the manuscript, sometimes even in the same sentence. I have already caught myself doing this again even in this very blog post in the days since I returned the manuscript. I wrote about the rules I gave for myself regarding I, we, you, or they here.

Hierarchy of Headings

I use Scrivener to write my books. That program makes it easy to see the hierarchy of headings. I did not do a good job in the exported Microsoft word document distinguishing between each heading. This is an extra step I need to remind myself to take next time I format a book for an editor.

Use Active Verbs

Instead of “have students” use “direct students to” or something more specific in the instructions for the reader.

Use Specific Language

When writing a book about spirituality, for example, the word “faith” can have many meanings. While Christians may reference “the faith” liberally in conversation, the term has to be made more specific in a book. In this particular book, for example, I had to replace “faith” with “doctrines” in many places to more clearly identify what I wanted the reader to understand.

 

February 4, 2018 Filed Under: Author Tips, On Writing

About Jared Dees

Jared Dees is passionate about sharing practical resources to teach faith. He is best known for his website The Religion Teacher and is the author of many books including 31 Days to Becoming a Better Religious Educator, Christ in the Classroom, and Beatitales: 80 Fables about the Beatitudes for Children.

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